The percussion is waaaaaaaaaay too powerful, and too filtered. The lead is on the bland side.
Keep going with it.
haha, thanks man. ill get to work on it. :D
That dudda-funk drum beat is fucking crunchy.
hmm, this could be....
....a great gangster rap song (and it would have to be gangster rap because the beat and riffs are a lot deeper than most hip-hop). waht you need to do is replace the riff you have going at the breakdown at 00:50 with lyrics, because that's the only effect that doesn't seem to fit with a rap song.
About the baseline; it's not that the base is exactly wrong, it's just that it's not fat enough, if you get what i mean. It doesn't do anything for the song. In (good) rap and hip-hop, the bassline is the equivalent of the kick drum in techno. If it's too quiet or not contributing to the song, it lowers the enjoyability of the song.
In other words, your bassline is whack, yo.
And the review goes....
Impressive as always, Nal.
I haven't actaully heard the original, so i'll have to go look it up, but great job on this track! For some reason, the main synth felt a little repetitive, but i guess its just me.
Don't forget, I'm still up for doing vocals!
Good to hear!
I may need some in the near future.
Wow, an amazing piece of music. what you need is a breakdown about 30 sec into it. make a new riff, or expand on the old one. in other words, it got a little repetitive, and the main riff is a little too quantized for my liking, but the song's ridiculously addictive. GO FOR THE GOLD!!!!
oh, and my name abbreviates to Mortos, not Mortosder, but no big deal!
Haha thanks for the comment
I'm really thinking of remixing and re-fixing this now that I'm getting better at FL :D
something goes here.
i think if you replace the organ with a guitar, it would make a nice metal riff. try that and see how it sounds.
Very cool! It got a little repetitive after a while, but overall a great track. Great job!
You had a really nice build up in the first 40 seconds, and then the claps come in and ruin it. i strongly suggest replacing them with snare, or removing them altogether. Also, the beat is way too 4x4 (you know, kick, snare, kick, snare
) try switching it up a bit (like the drum solo's you have)
About the drum solo's,the song seems to dive right in to them, without any warning, and then right back out. You also seem to be focusing WAY too much on the snare drum with the drum rolls that never seem to end. I suggest you clean it up a bit, and shorten it.
From the 2:00 min mark 'till the last 30 sec. i have no complaints.
In the last 30 sec. of the song, the moog arp (i'm assuming you're using FL studio) overpowers the other melodies, and to me, it seems like it doesn't quite fit. Your call on that one.
Anyways, i really enjoy this song, it just needs a little (more) work.
yea your right, i do need to change up the beat some. im just kinda tired on this song, and ill have to get to it some other time. thanks for your review though, i marked it as helpful, because it was! thanks
I just realized i havent reviewed this yet!
A good song, but I feel like the intro doesn't quite fit. I think it's a bit too much of a stretch to jump from the spacey intro into the hardcore body of the song. The outro works, but i think it's because you kind of faded in to it.
perhaps make the jump in the beginning a little bit less abrupt?
meh, good song anyways.
more than nice!
Fantastic! Gets a Five and a 10/10!
I found this track searching for my own song by the same name. you should check it out. BTW im sort of new to FL studio, so dont judge to harshly, but give me some good criticism!
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